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Comment by Shawna Lake on June 28, 2012 at 4:00pm

You have a gorgeous voice.

Comment by Britlin Losee on June 27, 2012 at 10:56pm

oh, and Aaron.... I have a girl harmonizing below me during those sections where I sing higher. I do not have a low voice whatsoever! :)

Comment by Britlin Losee on June 27, 2012 at 10:55pm

Thank you Yasmin and Aaron for your comments. It means so much to me. I love changing the melodic predictability so that the audience is always captivated... but I make it a point to have fluidity between sections so that people can't necessarily tell that changes are being made. I decided for this song to have a surprise middle section that's different from the entire song. I wanted to try something new. I went about writing this after a rehearsal with three of my friends. We were just practicing covers, but they inspired me with their passion and their love for playing music. So, I went home, wrote the lyrics to Phosphenes (after being inspired by the word on tumblr), and wrote this within a couple of weeks as a simple song. It represents rubbing your eyes because you can't believe what is in front of you. Is it a dream? Can this really be happening? Have I really found love? It's kind of like pinching yourself. Same analogy.

I will definitely join the Songwriters Group! thanks!

Comment by Aaron Beverly on June 27, 2012 at 2:31pm

I loved this, you've got a real talent here.  I don't think that your vocal volume is lacking I just think it seems like it would be conventionally sung with more of a chest voice on the part around 1:17 to 1:47.  But I think it works with the way you sing, the falsetto is sort of entrancing  so I feel like it works well.

Comment by Yasmin de Soiza on June 27, 2012 at 1:21pm

Hey Britlin! This is a really interesting song, and I think you applied some REALLY great and interesting chord changes that change the melodic predictability of your song. You have a really great connection between the melody and the chord changes starting at :52 through 1:17. You also use an unusual song structure for this song - not the typical verse/chorus/bridge structure. How did you go about writing this? What inspired you to write this song? You should join the Songwriters Group to share this song with other songwriters on the site!

Comment by Britlin Losee on June 25, 2012 at 8:46pm

Thank you, Jonathan! I made this video basically so that it has a Youtube license/protection. I'd like to record this professionally, since the piano was quite overpowering.

Comment by Jonathon Hampton on June 25, 2012 at 2:50pm

Lovely! I'm sure it's tough to manage balance when camera placement is a major factor, but piano volume aside, I bet we can get more volume out of your voice while maintaining that ethereal emotion. And don't forget to spit out that text.

Comment by Ryan Christopher Gourley on June 23, 2012 at 4:43pm

that fourth chord in the first progression is haunting! brilliant job =)